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Bullets

Words can also be like bullets.

Some just fly by and miss you, not affecting you.

Some just graze you, leaving a small wound that will heal over time.

But the one bullet that does hit you, it hits you hard.

Leaving a wound that will never fully heal.

Leaving a scar that will last your lifetime.

They can make you bleed heavily.

It could kill you over time if no one is around to help you.

If someone does help you, it will still hurt for a while

Then when the pain stops, you think you're fine.

But when you look down at it, It's still there.

Being a painful reminder all your life.

Making you wish it never happened.

But the person who shot you is affected too.

At first they feel successful, But they'll eventually regret it.

Also leaving a painful memory for all their life.

Everyone gets affected in the end.

Words are JUST like bullets.
Something i thought up in school. This is the whole reason why i like to go to school, it inspires me to draw and write, anything to not listen to the teacher :D
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Falrone Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
My...
this is wonderful.
The symbolism in it all is something beautifully written.
Personally, I sort of feel as if a blade would be better for this.
Not in the cutting sort of perspective, but more of swords.

I'm not good at critiquing so... best I could say it I guess.
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DSteffi Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Nice perspective. I agree with you. Nicely written.

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All the effort is pointless if you don't believe in yourself.
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Snipes2324 Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2011
Thanks :)
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KemoLove Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2011
but some people just dont give a shit at all+
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Snipes2324 Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2011
Yeah that's true,but i was trying to mean like later in life.
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KemoLove Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2011
i hope they start caring later in life it will be a miricale
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rottenmaliceETC Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2011  Student General Artist
nice one.
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Snipes2324 Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2011
Thanks :)
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HerRefuge Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Wow... fantastic work! I absolutely love this! (: I love that you compare every aspect of being shot, all the way to being the shooter, and it's so accurate.

Keep up the great work!
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Snipes2324 Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2011
Thanks :D :D
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HerRefuge Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
No problem!
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LittlePsychoBxtch Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
who's class did you write this in?? :O
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Snipes2324 Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2011
Orchestra, lol
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LittlePsychoBxtch Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Graybeal let you do that? LOL
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Snipes2324 Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2011
ahhahahahahahaha, No. I was supposed to be doing theory work. oh well, ill just do it in the morning. XD
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LittlePsychoBxtch Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
you better, he'll kill ya lol
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StaticWaves Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I was going to write a critique for you, but I didn't think I could make it stretch long enough. However...

I absolutely love the comparison you used in describing the painful aftermath of harsh words. There is a good amount of truth in this poem that rings quite loudly. I especially enjoyed lines two through four.
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Snipes2324 Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2011
I don't know what to say except thanks, but that doesn't seem to sum up my appreciation enough!
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StaticWaves Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome. It's a really good poem.
Btw, I just noticed your username. Given the title, seems fitting. :P
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